BUSINESS Leter
In this project, we practiced formal writing. We did this buy writing a business letter to a company or organization. We wrote to them about certain issues about there company and things that they can do to improve there company or make it better. In my business letter, I wrote to my local recreation center. I said that they should improve some of the facilities at the rec center so it will make more people inclined to visit and come play and have a fun time. In this project, I learned how to write a formal letter, and communicate like a real business man. I sent my letter, but the recreation council never wrote back.
Here is my business letter:
Steven Carroll
3165 Pasternack Place
San Diego, CA 92123
[email protected]
September 16, 2014
Serra Mesa Recreation Council
Serra Mesa Recreation Center
Village Glen Drive
San Diego, CA 92123
Dear Serra Mesa Recreation Council:
I am writing this to you because I would like to refurbish the recreation center. I believe that it is time for new appliances for the recreation center to make it look much more appealing and more enjoyable for the people that go there often.
First off, I would like to suggest that we acquire new benches for the indoor basketball courts. The writers for the San Diego official website say that some of the benches in the indoor basketball court are getting to be old and broken down. Also, I would like to propose that we take action to repave the outdoor basketball courts. The cement is beginning to crack and it starts to become dangerous to play on the court and someone could get hurt. Having these new attractions would encourage children to visit the recreation center to enjoy these new facilities.
Therefore, I would like to ask for you to consider this letter and think about the ways to improve our recreation center and make it a place where children and adults can play basketball and use the recreation center as they please.
Sincerely,
Steven Carroll
3165 Pasternack Place
San Diego, CA 92123
[email protected]
September 16, 2014
Serra Mesa Recreation Council
Serra Mesa Recreation Center
Village Glen Drive
San Diego, CA 92123
Dear Serra Mesa Recreation Council:
I am writing this to you because I would like to refurbish the recreation center. I believe that it is time for new appliances for the recreation center to make it look much more appealing and more enjoyable for the people that go there often.
First off, I would like to suggest that we acquire new benches for the indoor basketball courts. The writers for the San Diego official website say that some of the benches in the indoor basketball court are getting to be old and broken down. Also, I would like to propose that we take action to repave the outdoor basketball courts. The cement is beginning to crack and it starts to become dangerous to play on the court and someone could get hurt. Having these new attractions would encourage children to visit the recreation center to enjoy these new facilities.
Therefore, I would like to ask for you to consider this letter and think about the ways to improve our recreation center and make it a place where children and adults can play basketball and use the recreation center as they please.
Sincerely,
Steven Carroll
Here is the fact sheet I used to make my business letter:
Argument:
We should fix the Serra Mesa Recreation Center.
Sources:
1. <www.sandiego.goc/park-and-recreation/centers/recctr/serramesa.shtml>
2. <www.serramesa.org/>
3.<http://www.yelp.com/biz/serra-mesa-recreation-center-san-diego>
Facts:
- “The benches in the basketball court are old and need to be replaced.” 1
- The outdoor basketball courts need to be re-done on the edges.
- The edges of the outdoor basketball courts are dangerous because the concrete is slanted up and someone could hurt and they could sew the rec center.
- We need to redo the concret hill leading down to the baseball fields, it is dangerous and someone could easily fall down it.
- “The basketballs are old and need to be replaced”. 2
- The sand on the playground should be replaced because it gets all over the playground and ruins it. 3
- “ There are not enough workers on duty during open hours. There needs to be more people on duty to watch over the children on the playground.” 2
- The rec center is too expensive to fix at the moment. Says the rec center council.
- The council also says that the outdoor basketball courts are to fix because the concrete on the edges is very thick and that it would be very expensive to fix.
- “The rec center can also be closed when it is supposed to be open.” 3
Possible Solutions:
I think that we need to fundraise and get the money that we need to fix the issues that the rec center has. Also, we could have sign ups for volunteers to help with the construction of the new benches, help buy the new basketballs, and help fix the edges of the outdoor basketball courts.
We should fix the Serra Mesa Recreation Center.
Sources:
1. <www.sandiego.goc/park-and-recreation/centers/recctr/serramesa.shtml>
2. <www.serramesa.org/>
3.<http://www.yelp.com/biz/serra-mesa-recreation-center-san-diego>
Facts:
- “The benches in the basketball court are old and need to be replaced.” 1
- The outdoor basketball courts need to be re-done on the edges.
- The edges of the outdoor basketball courts are dangerous because the concrete is slanted up and someone could hurt and they could sew the rec center.
- We need to redo the concret hill leading down to the baseball fields, it is dangerous and someone could easily fall down it.
- “The basketballs are old and need to be replaced”. 2
- The sand on the playground should be replaced because it gets all over the playground and ruins it. 3
- “ There are not enough workers on duty during open hours. There needs to be more people on duty to watch over the children on the playground.” 2
- The rec center is too expensive to fix at the moment. Says the rec center council.
- The council also says that the outdoor basketball courts are to fix because the concrete on the edges is very thick and that it would be very expensive to fix.
- “The rec center can also be closed when it is supposed to be open.” 3
Possible Solutions:
I think that we need to fundraise and get the money that we need to fix the issues that the rec center has. Also, we could have sign ups for volunteers to help with the construction of the new benches, help buy the new basketballs, and help fix the edges of the outdoor basketball courts.
Finally, here is my works cited:
Wor
“Serr a Mesa Recreation Center” 8 September, 2014.
<www.sandiego.goc/park-and-recreation/centers/recctr/serramesa.shtml>
“Serra Mesa Recreation Council” 8 September, 2014
<www.serramesa.org/>
“Serra Mesa Recreation Center” 8 September, 2014
<http://www.yelp.com/biz/serra-mesa-recreation-center-san-diego>
“Serr a Mesa Recreation Center” 8 September, 2014.
<www.sandiego.goc/park-and-recreation/centers/recctr/serramesa.shtml>
“Serra Mesa Recreation Council” 8 September, 2014
<www.serramesa.org/>
“Serra Mesa Recreation Center” 8 September, 2014
<http://www.yelp.com/biz/serra-mesa-recreation-center-san-diego>